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Our Generation v.1 by ~peaveyGTR:iconpeaveyGTR:





I see the broken eyes of a generation staring back at me
with dirt on their backs and nothing to say,
clenching their tiny dreams, with their tiny hands
melting beneath the heat lamps of the privlidged

I see a world of cosmic philosophers and bible puppets
clinging to the vision of the loudest prophet
with the biggest wallet and the newest guns
the nicest compliments, and a contagious disease

Ralley now and wave the flags
painted in the purist colors
to be blended with the other flags
and funnelled into a bubbling black soup,
in a cauldron, hanging precariously on a bar
above all the ones who are wrong. the other ones.

Today I watched an advertisement
and two million dollars flashing before my eyes
for an advertisement about a new beer
which I found in my cart the next day

When I tasted the tastlessness
I vomited the bolts
the concrete
and the sweat,

the mind-numbers.

A little later a scientist released a report
stating all his other reports were wrong
and our minds are all dead
extinguished by capitolism --
a mere side effect.
©2005-2009 ~peaveyGTR
:iconpeaveygtr:

Author's Comments

this is NOT a final copy and is in the VERY rough development stages. It's an Allen Ginsberg inspired type of poem (as evident by the first two stanzas), yet it still has a long way to go. The first two stanzas are probably a good indicator as to how the rest of this will look, and I threw in the latter stuff kind of spur of the moment to at least give this some sort of rough point to the poem for now.

If you've ever read "Howl" by Allen Ginsberg, you'll see how this style relates. I figured Howl needed a modern day adaptation. Expect more releases in the future as this progresses.

Anyways, leave any comments that come to mind when reading this little scrap, they could come in handy.

coverart by ~kaichen_stock

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:iconathenaness:
this was just so very.. it was awesome. A strong message well-written

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I believe in peace, bitch
:iconpeaveygtr:
thank you, I'm glad you liked it

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Here's my whole life described in a sentence for you to judge in a second. :threaten:


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:iconnotanormalwayoflife:
Very inspirering, i sometimes i feel that our generation lack the ability to define itself, an issue i think you embrace very well in this poem. looking forward to seeing the final edition.

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War is Peace - Freedom is Slavery - Ignorance is Strength
:iconpeaveygtr:
glad you liked it, thanks for the comment :-)

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Here's my whole life described in a sentence for you to judge in a second. :threaten:


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:iconplathdoll:
i really see the ginsberg connection... and i think you've done a marvelous job. the current state of modern society is mind-boggling in its materialism and half-truths... the mechanism that spins humanity is so disruptive to the natural... and I think with this beginning stage you show that magnificently well... the ending stanza was perfect, I think, and I think every other aspect is as well-- except for a few minor spelling errors you will probably catch on your own. However, if you feel that this isn't complete yet and there are still changes to be made, improvements to encounter, and things of that nature, I'll be definitely sure to look out for a more developed version, because I can't see how this could get much better insight-wise and such.

I'd add it to my favourites-- but seeing as it's not fully ready, I'll wait on that.

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Dying is an art, like everything else.
:iconpeaveygtr:
thanks for the good comment.

i'm predicting this poem will take awhile to finish. it's one of those poems you have to pick up and write more with it now and then over the course of a long period of time. I think it helps get every aspect of life in - and really be a true mirror of society how I see it. And Ginsberg took over a year to write his, so i'm going to do the same.

but yes, I kind of let this one grew on me, and I like the short version now.. so I can always submit this one with the ending and then cut off the ending to merge it into something bigger. The hardest part is to not just be content with this short one.

yay for comments yay

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Here's my whole life described in a sentence for you to judge in a second. :threaten:


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:iconplathdoll:
I really am anticipating what will come next with this... and it's exciting to see such enthusiasm over a piece of work and so much dedication and time go into something... good luck.

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Dying is an art, like everything else.

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